Lonely,standing over everything below Surrounded,
by nothing but cloudsin the air,
a depressing silence creeps
the clouds seem to be drooping
Almost as much as me
The cold wind whistles
my thoughts are very slow
nothing is making sense
why am I here,
and how
Darkness is slowly approaching
Wandering the clouds,
who don't understand
why I am sad,
wearily scanning the area around me tired of this boring place,
when can i leave...I know, now.
your welcome, from willis
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This is a terribly written and worded poem. It deserves a E-, but thats being generous. I think mine is a whole lot better and that conner was not trying on this poem at all.
ReplyDeleteJust kidding, I like how conner used personification for the clouds and how he makes you feel isolated and just left to die. My favorite line in the poem is "a depressing silence creeps" because it makes my feel like I am all alone and depressed. I also like how Willis forget almost every comma.
i can't believe willis translated that...wow. ben that was so mean in the beginning but then you were being truthful and i agree with you
ReplyDeleteYou should have done it for one of the mood poems if there was a picuture to go with it, because it sounds depressing..kinda.
ReplyDeleteIt was for one of the pictures
ReplyDeleteben that was sorta emo wut u said but its a good poem connor
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